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Sound Drabbles For open_on_sunday 01/23/05 - #1-3

This week the challenge as recommended by tastylilgifty: SOUND

Cross posted to open_on_sunday and my regular journal


BtVS – Season 5 – The Body – Buffy

1. Screaming Quiet

“Mom?” Buffy calls, pausing by the flowers Brian sent her mother. “Hey. Flower-gettin' lady. Want me to pick Dawn up from school?” she shouts up the stairs. “Mom?” she tries again, yelling towards the kitchen.

Buffy turns, facing the livingroom, “Mom?” she questions softly, spying Joyce on the couch. “Mommy?” Dead silence.

She grabs her mother by the shoulders and shakes her, not fully comprehending the lack of response. Her own heartbeat pounds in her ears. “Mom, mom, mom, mom!” the frightened girl screams into her mother’s passive face.

All she can do is call 911 and wait, in shock.


BtVS – Season 5 – The Body – Kevin,Dawn, Buffy

2. Sorrowful Messenger

Kevin notices Dawn tense up as her sister enters the classroom. It’s never a good thing when family interrupts, and she doesn’t look real happy to be there.

“Dawn, I have to talk to you,” Bunny, or is it Buffy, begs.

“Can it wait? I’m in the middle of class.”

He watches as the door closes behind the girls. Along with everyone else, they stare out the window and wonder what the drama is today.

It’s Dawn’s shrieked “No!” that cuts through him, unable to tear his eyes away as she slumps down to the ground, crying bitterly in disbelief.


BtVS – Season 5 – The Body – Xander

3. Up Against the Wall

There’s no thought involved. One minute Xander’s standing amongst his friends, mourning the passing of a woman they all love, and the next he’s buried mid-arm deep in the drywall. For five seconds it gives him satisfaction – the crunchy sound of destruction – of having done something concrete, no pun intended.

He’s no stranger to death, coming up against it on a nightly basis. It just feels different when it’s someone you know. Never to hear Joyce say: “Why don’t you stay for dinner, sweetie,” or anything else ever again. It breaks his heart.

The world has lost a good woman.

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Comments

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enigmaticblues
Jan. 24th, 2005 08:34 pm (UTC)
Wow. That's some high-impact emotion there. Wonderful portrayal of grief in all three.
spikes_heart
Jan. 25th, 2005 07:11 am (UTC)
Thanks, hon. The Body does it to me every single time. It makes it all too easy to recall my own mom's demise, so this has become very personalized for me.
poetlover
Jan. 24th, 2005 08:43 pm (UTC)
Heartbreaking.

I hope that things start looking up for you soon, sweetie. I send you hugs and warm thoughts. ::hugs::
spikes_heart
Jan. 25th, 2005 07:12 am (UTC)
I'm glad the emotions came across, and thanks so much for your kind words. I hope so, too. **hugs you back**
robintcj
Jan. 25th, 2005 10:59 pm (UTC)
*whine*

So sad. But so good. I love the way you don't throw the "sound" part in the reader's face. It's just there, it's just a fact, but it's still really important.

I think my favorite is the second one; probably because it's Kevin's point of view, which isn't generally explored, but was kind of used in the episode itself for the moment.
spikes_heart
Jan. 25th, 2005 11:01 pm (UTC)
The Body will always be a touchpoint with me. I identify much too strongly with it. Glad you liked my approach. Kevin was the only POV that worked. Believe it or not, I tried with Dawn, Buffy and the teacher first.
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